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Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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-Ralsei- wrote:
-Ralsei- wrote:
-Ralsei- wrote:
It seems like this topic isn't working. What is your descion:
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?

Keep it going, but make things make sense, and have effect.
However, I’d say redo Season 2, Episode one, since some stuff feels weird, mainly max coming back, since that removes a lot of character development knowing someone that they almost managed to become friends with died

In episode 2 you'll find out why he managed to live. :)

Yes but it removes character development and is a boring twist

ngl I have to agree. I've read it 2 times, and thought to myself: Am I boring? Or do I suck at stories?

You're not boring when you're writing something. It just doesn't makes sense, that's another issue. It just feels unnatural and meh that's another issue, but it's not that boring.
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-Ralsei- wrote:
-Ralsei- wrote:
-Ralsei- wrote:
It seems like this topic isn't working. What is your descion:
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?

Keep it going, but make things make sense, and have effect.
However, I’d say redo Season 2, Episode one, since some stuff feels weird, mainly max coming back, since that removes a lot of character development knowing someone that they almost managed to become friends with died

In episode 2 you'll find out why he managed to live. :)

Yes but it removes character development and is a boring twist

ngl I have to agree. I've read it 2 times, and thought to myself: Am I boring? Or do I suck at stories?

If you want advice for how to write fanfics, look at my episode for this fanfic, or re-read MKPC danganronpa
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Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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France
-Ralsei- wrote:
-Ralsei- wrote:
-Ralsei- wrote:
It seems like this topic isn't working. What is your descion:
To this series to end?
Or the series to live on?

Keep it going, but make things make sense, and have effect.
However, I’d say redo Season 2, Episode one, since some stuff feels weird, mainly max coming back, since that removes a lot of character development knowing someone that they almost managed to become friends with died

In episode 2 you'll find out why he managed to live. :)

Yes but it removes character development and is a boring twist

ngl I have to agree. I've read it 2 times, and thought to myself: Am I boring? Or do I suck at stories?

If you want advice for how to write fanfics, look at my episode for this fanfic, or re-read MKPC danganronpa

Yeah exactly.
Your end was pretty epic and it felt like Danganronpa, it actually felt exciting, made sense, was flowing well and was fun.

While for the Ralsei's parts... I'm sorry Ralsei but this ain't it
Messages 2376 - Golden Mario Golden Mario
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Japan
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

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Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.
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Messages 5400 - King Mario King Mario
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United Kingdom
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

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Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

For me, it would be similar, but MysteryMan’s in 4th (don’t get me wrong, it’s good, but nothing special compared to the 3 above)
Messages 2376 - Golden Mario Golden Mario
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Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

For me, it would be similar, but MysteryMan’s in 4th (don’t get me wrong, it’s good, but nothing special compared to the 3 above)

Your opinion is biased :p
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Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

Then we don't have the same tastes :(
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog :p especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of characters

To me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twlightverse 3,99/10
Messages 2376 - Golden Mario Golden Mario
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Japan
Invu wrote:
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

Then we don't have the same tastes :(
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog :p especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of characters

To me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twlightverse 3,99/10

Your fanfic is much better than that :)
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Messages 5400 - King Mario King Mario
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battle6798 pts ★ Racer
United Kingdom
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

For me, it would be similar, but MysteryMan’s in 4th (don’t get me wrong, it’s good, but nothing special compared to the 3 above)

Your opinion is biased :p

Cry about it Based on popularity, I feel like it would be similar, but with Fways’ higher (1st or 2nd, since the fanfic war that never existed is between me and Fways (but I feel like he takes the lead, even if mine has more followers))
Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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France
Invu wrote:
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

Then we don't have the same tastes :(
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog :p especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of characters

To me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twilightverse 3,99/10

Your fanfic is much better than that :)

Uh excuse me, I don't think it is. It's not well-written contrary to every other fanfic except Twilightverse, it's also very weird, boring, it fails the twists, it's not exciting at all, there's no suspense and there's no fun 😞
Messages 5400 - King Mario King Mario
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Invu wrote:
Invu wrote:
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

Then we don't have the same tastes :(
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog :p especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of characters

To me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twilightverse 3,99/10

Your fanfic is much better than that :)

Uh excuse me, I don't think it is. It's not well-written contrary to every other fanfic except Twilightverse, it's also very weird, boring, it fails the twists, it's not exciting at all, there's no suspense and there's no fun 😞

I like how it is more a different theme from the rest. While the others are about action, I feel like yours is more comedy, with a bit of action sprinkled in every so often
Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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France
Invu wrote:
Invu wrote:
Off-topic: Ranking of the 5 current fanfics
1: MysteryMan's
2: TheNudgyHampter's
3: Lely's
4: Fways's
5: This

Spoiler [ShowHide]
Although I do like Fways's a lot, I just despise swearing and there's a lot of that. Otherwise it's still a great fanfic and would rank #1.

Then we don't have the same tastes :(
To me, swearing isn't an issue at all and can make the fanfic more funny, or more sad, more exciting, I don't know. It's like a spice.
I also think MysteryMan's one is good, but I prefer Danganronpa and KohLanta to it pog :p especially because I'm more familiar with 1) the style and 2) the roster of characters

To me its more like
1) Koh-Lanta Mario 2022 10/10
2) Danganronpa MKPC 9,5/10
3) Toadal Drama n Knuckles 9/10
4) MKPC Archipel 4/10
5) The Twilightverse 3,99/10

Your fanfic is much better than that :)

Uh excuse me, I don't think it is. It's not well-written contrary to every other fanfic except Twilightverse, it's also very weird, boring, it fails the twists, it's not exciting at all, there's no suspense and there's no fun 😞

I like how it is more a different theme from the rest. While the others are about action, I feel like yours is more comedy, with a bit of action sprinkled in every so often

But comedy is boring and cringe 😔
Everytime I try to do some action scenes it fails.
The scene of the fight with Ralsei in my fanfic just didn't felt grand at all, it felt like... a moment where me and you, Nudge, died, and that's it
There's nothing that could make you excited about the next episode, the next scene, no there's nothing.
Messages 518 - Mario Mario
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I wanna become a good guy in chapter 6, and join forces with the good guys.
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Messages 2175 - Golden Mario Golden Mario
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Indian Ocean
The reason why I'm reviving this, is because I didn't give it a proper set-off. To get a final goodbye, I want YOU to make a story on here.  You can name it whatever you want, but remember, make sure to put FINALE in front of the episode you called it. Let's see how you do on here!
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Messages 2175 - Golden Mario Golden Mario
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Indian Ocean
Also,  you can on:y make one episode. Because I want to see ALL of you to make an episode, one at a time. Makes sense, right? Idc if is part 1, part 2, part 3 btw.
Messages 1560 - Golden Mario Golden Mario
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United States
Are The Shards Based On Kirby 64 The Crystal Shards? Because I Feel Like Multiple Things Have Shards In Them And It Shouldn't Be Considered Copying Another Thing Due To The Amount Of Times Shards Have Been Used.
Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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Coopa2-64 wrote:
Are The Shards Based On Kirby 64 The Crystal Shards? Because I Feel Like Multiple Things Have Shards In Them And It Shouldn't Be Considered Copying Another Thing Due To The Amount Of Times Shards Have Been Used.

Nudge basically created a fanfic with shards right before this one so...
Messages 5400 - King Mario King Mario
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Revive
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Messages 11441 - King Mario King Mario
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Final episode soon guys... 👀

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