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6102 pts ★ RacerOn 2023-02-02 at 17:58:01
Again, why are people giving free facepalms ? Nobody facepalmed Pianta or Dietsoda when they asked to join my fanfic.
Oh that’s what they said? Oops mistranslation…
I was just facepalming because i saw ther people facepalming
Why do that, you facepalm because you want to think so, not to make a big number of facepalm in 1 message
Even if it's a good point that you are mentioning, it's true that a big amount of facepalms can convince you to react with it as well, since society tend to follow the trends and stuff, like what's popular, what's done by many etc.
But if you think about it more deeply, you realize that it's not facepalm worthy
1On 2023-02-02 at 17:51:39
EP4 PART 1 - The Power Outage
After a long night of partying and getting drunk, Fiery and co. decide to escape the city after 1 day of sleep deprivation.
Lemon: I’m strooooooooooonggg as an oooniiiiiiiii…
IlluZhion: Remiiiiiiiiiinds me of the tiiiiiiiiiiiiiime I plaaaaaaaayed Touuuuuuhouuuuu Proooooject and I had to fiiiiiiight Suiiiiiiikaaaaaaaaaaa…
Lemon: Ah, screeeew thaaaaaaat, let’s-
*Kissing*
Fiery: Bruh… What the fuck?
Cringeh: dhdshjhkjhwefhuefnsfhsfshfksak
???: Mind if you shut your mouth, bitch?
osc: Innit man this guy keeps on blabbering about what he did for his maths homework like my guy shut your mouth for 1 second
Fiery: oh crap why’s ralsei here man NAWWWWWW
Ralsei: Cry about it bitch
Fiery: I will turn your skin into a coat. Anyways, we really need to escape this place, our heads are on the line.
IlluZhion: Iiiiiiii’mma caaaaaaarryyyyyy Leeeeeeeeemoooooon, she’s toooooo druuuuuuuuuunk to go alooooooooone…
xrunner: Ain’t no way man, you’re also drunk as hell…
Ralsei: Honestly bro, these two are seriously weird…
IlluZhion: Noooooooooooooo weeeeeeeee’re noooooooot…
Fiery: Dude, you literally gave your own girlfriend 5 gallons of sake… Hey, stop tampering with my voice lines!
IlluZhion: Hahahahahahahahahaha, no waaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy, maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan…
osc: are you having a stroke
Cringeh: AAAAAAAAAA
Zombies: We’ll be taking him.
Lemon: Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww- what?! WHO?! NO-ONE DID A THING!
Fiery: Oh good riddance, he’s a party pooper. Nobody cares about him that much anyway, just a nerd.
Popplio: At least he’s not a dog
Fiery: Kind of wish he was, then he wouldn’t be able to speak so much.
xrunner: Hey while you guys were chatting I got the secret Green Hill Zone level
IlluZhion: NOBODY CARES, CRINGEH COULD DIE!!! But to be fair, I did kind of hate him…
Lemon: Wait, was I drunk?! WHY AM I HALF-
osc: Put your hand up if you cared about him. See, nobody except you two care.
Fiery: you don’t have hands…
osc: that’s still a no for caring about him
IlluZhion: I didn’t even give two shits… So long as my Lemon is safe, I just acted like I cared lol
Fiery: what about Shifu and Hiku who are just standing at the door right there…
Lemon: WHO THE HELL ARE THEY?!
IlluZhion: One second, I need to talk to them…
Fiery: Sayonara, plot armor…STOP MESSING WITH MY VOICE LINES
osc: and you’re having another stroke…
IlluZhion: Just shut up Fiery, I need to chat with ‘em…
Hiku-chan: Hey IlluZhion-san~
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! WHY ARE YOU TALKING TO MY ILLUZHION LIKE THAT?!
Shifu: Oh, you don’t know? Uh, move along, cat girl, he’s my husband…
Lemon: WWWWWWWWWWWWW- WHAT?!
Fiery: ah crap lol more conflict…i swear man i’m going to commit manslaughter
osc: STOP HAVING A STROKE, JESUS CHRIST!
Lemon: HOW DARE YOU ATTEMPT TO SEDUCE MY ILLUZHION!!!
Hiku-chan: You sure you wanna fight me, feline?!
*Hiku-chan’s lost eye glows*
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! YOU ONLY HAVE ONE EYE!!!
Hiku-chan: And I have a power that bests your own. Leave my husband alone.
Lemon: Grrrrrrrrr…
Shifu: YOUR HUSBAND?! HE LOVES ME MORE!!!
Lemon: BOTH OF YOU ARE WRONG!!! HE LOVES ME THE MOST!!!
IlluZhion: Oh boy, more conflict…
Cosmo: Well at least try to stop your wives from fighting, dude…
Popplio: Why does polygamy always end this way…?
Ralsei: HUH?!
Popplio: Oh nevermind...
Ralsei: EXACTLY BITCH!!!
Fiery: Pssst guys, let’s just go without them, they will never stop at this pace.
Lemon: Fine, we’re going…
Hiku-chan: Keep your hands off him, both of you…
Shifu and Lemon: …
Fiery: So we going now? After 8 million years? Good, let’s go.
Back at home…
*VOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*
Hiku-chan: A power outage? What the hell is going on here?!
IlluZhion: Let’s go check the power…
Lemon: I’m going with you…
Fiery: Why are we checking the power instead of finding a way out of this labyrinth of buildings?
xrunner: Well IlluZhion’s plan does sound better, in all fairness…
Shifu: Why don’t we all go?
In the basement…
Hiku-chan: This place gives me trauma from somewhere…
Shifu: Don’t think about that…
Lemon: Well I’m going with IlluZhion, you simps better find someone else to leech onto…
Fiery: I’m not going inside here.
Nudge: Cry about it, we’re all going in.
Fiery: you know what i dont care about your opinion on it i’m not going inside i’m running away and probably encountering the zombies but i dont give a crap since its better than staying with you barnacles!
IlluZhion: Let’s just go…
Fiery: Jeez, you don’t have to be this stoic… OK FINE I’M GOING… I want to kill myself right now…
osc: Dude, it’s just a prank… Calm down…
Fiery: I mean going in this dark place. Did I ever tell you I had a fear of the dark? That’s why I had this lighter.
Dark: Am I a joke to you?
Fiery: yes in fact you are all you do in this story is be a fortnite fanboy go catch a victory royale or some shit
IlluZhion: Stop arguing, the lot of you… Let’s go…
Fiery: holy crap i’ve turned into what i want to destroy most…I HATE YOU SCRIPT WRITER! (i mean myself)
At the branching paths…
Hiku-chan: What the hell? How big is this place?
osc: By the looks of it, it’s so big you could make this place into a bunker…
Shifu: Better than the one me and Hiku were stuck in for hours… Wait, come to think of it that’s when we fell for IlluZhion…
IlluZhion: Let’s split into groups… Me, Hiku-chan, Shifu, Lemon and Fiery are going one way…
Nudge: Obviously you go with all the girls…
osc: Well Fiery’s a dude…
Nudge: I’m not blind…
IlluZhion: Nudge, osc and the others go the other way…
xrunner: I’mma go my own way… I can noclip my way in…
Fiery: No thank you…*runs out the door*
IlluZhion: Ok, both of you can go your way…
Lemon: Let’s get going then…
Hiku-chan: Don’t this remind you of somethin’? Like…
IlluZhion: The Catacombs? Nah, not really.
Shifu: Well of course, you ARE a vampire…
Lemon: Wait I just noticed something… You two aren’t vampires… You sure you’re married to IlluZhion?
Hiku-chan: Well the thing is… Both me and Shifu are phantoms…
Lemon: Uhhh…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Can you guys go on instead of having this chit chat?
Hiku-chan: Gah, fine…
Lemon: Welp, lookee here…
Hiku-chan: How on earth are we gonna get up THERE?!
Lemon: That’s the thing, me and IlluZhion are gonna go up there. You guys just look about below, ok?
Fiery in a muffled voice: How about you guys actually go back instead of having this shit?
IlluZhion: No goddamn way. This is my- correction, OUR city. We ain’t leavin’ till the very end…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Well, okay, see ya.
Shifu: What a coward…
Fiery: HEARD THAT! FINE IF YOU WANT ME DOWN THERE THEN FINE YOU PIECES OF SHIT.
Shifu: No, coward, you go cry about it…
Fiery: OK THAT’S IT…
*Fiery just runs off shouting “FUCK YOU DIPSHITS”*
Hiku-chan: What?
Lemon: Like we can’t hear that…
IlluZhion: Lemon, let’s just get going…
Lemon: Okie~
Meanwhile…
Nudge: Urrrgggh, just thinking about this place makes me irk…
Popplio: At least there aren’t any dogs h-
*WOOF WOOF*
Popplio: AAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRGH!
Nudge: Oops, sorry, just my MP3 player sound effect 😛
Popplio: WHAT?!
osc: Stop it, both of you. Let’s get going…
K: I agree, we can’t afford to lose anyone else, like what happened with Cringeh…
Cosmo: Oh, like anyone cares about him! Let’s just move on…
Elsewhere…
xrunner: Whew, I’m almost there…
*BRAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNSSSS…*
xrunner: Fuck that, I’m go-
*He can’t noclip through the terrain*
xrunner: Ah bollocks…
Cringeh?: Urrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhh…
xrunner: WHAT THE FUCK?! CRINGEH?!
Huge Zombie: Reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnggggggge… Geeeeeeettt reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnggggggge…
xrunner: Fuck this shit, I’m running away…
*One of the zombies bites xrunner*
xrunner: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Also elsewhere…
Fiery: Man I actually feel kind of bad…
*Clanking noises*
Nudge: WHAT?! DON’T TELL ME THE ZOMBIES FOUND US AS WELL!
*Ceiling burns away*
Fiery: WOAAAAHH! Dang it, should have known that this city was still in construction.
Dark: What the fuck are you doing here, Fiery? I thought you chickened out…
Fiery: I thought you were getting one of those bitch Victory Royales…
Dark: THE FUCK DID YOU SAY?!
Fiery: It’s not chicken to do something that is reasonable. But I guess I interrupted you having a victory royale, so yay.
Dark: Oh you are going to-
osc: Listen its not worth it
Back with IlluZhion…
Lemon: This is kinda cute… You, me, this complete darkness…
IlluZhion: Heh, ya think so?
Lemon: Just c’mere and-
*Kissing*
Hiku-chan: What the fuck? Are they kissing AGAIN?!
Shifu: Sounds like it… Let’s go, Hiku…
IlluZhion: Oh my gosh, you’re so-
*Kissing continues*
Script writer: Ok, can you actually stop?
IlluZhion: NO!
*Kissing*
Script writer: Honestly…
Shifu: Didn’t the script writer literally just tell them to stop? Ok, let’s roll…
xrunner?: BRAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSS…
Hiku-chan: Lol, we can’t even get bitten…
Shifu: Oh yeah, this armor…
*They just walk through like nothing happened*
After a long night of partying and getting drunk, Fiery and co. decide to escape the city after 1 day of sleep deprivation.
Lemon: I’m strooooooooooonggg as an oooniiiiiiiii…
IlluZhion: Remiiiiiiiiiinds me of the tiiiiiiiiiiiiiime I plaaaaaaaayed Touuuuuuhouuuuu Proooooject and I had to fiiiiiiight Suiiiiiiikaaaaaaaaaaa…
Lemon: Ah, screeeew thaaaaaaat, let’s-
*Kissing*
Fiery: Bruh… What the fuck?
Cringeh: dhdshjhkjhwefhuefnsfhsfshfksak
???: Mind if you shut your mouth, bitch?
osc: Innit man this guy keeps on blabbering about what he did for his maths homework like my guy shut your mouth for 1 second
Fiery: oh crap why’s ralsei here man NAWWWWWW
Ralsei: Cry about it bitch
Fiery: I will turn your skin into a coat. Anyways, we really need to escape this place, our heads are on the line.
IlluZhion: Iiiiiiii’mma caaaaaaarryyyyyy Leeeeeeeeemoooooon, she’s toooooo druuuuuuuuuunk to go alooooooooone…
xrunner: Ain’t no way man, you’re also drunk as hell…
Ralsei: Honestly bro, these two are seriously weird…
IlluZhion: Noooooooooooooo weeeeeeeee’re noooooooot…
Fiery: Dude, you literally gave your own girlfriend 5 gallons of sake… Hey, stop tampering with my voice lines!
IlluZhion: Hahahahahahahahahaha, no waaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy, maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan…
osc: are you having a stroke
Cringeh: AAAAAAAAAA
Zombies: We’ll be taking him.
Lemon: Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww- what?! WHO?! NO-ONE DID A THING!
Fiery: Oh good riddance, he’s a party pooper. Nobody cares about him that much anyway, just a nerd.
Popplio: At least he’s not a dog
Fiery: Kind of wish he was, then he wouldn’t be able to speak so much.
xrunner: Hey while you guys were chatting I got the secret Green Hill Zone level
IlluZhion: NOBODY CARES, CRINGEH COULD DIE!!! But to be fair, I did kind of hate him…
Lemon: Wait, was I drunk?! WHY AM I HALF-
osc: Put your hand up if you cared about him. See, nobody except you two care.
Fiery: you don’t have hands…
osc: that’s still a no for caring about him
IlluZhion: I didn’t even give two shits… So long as my Lemon is safe, I just acted like I cared lol
Fiery: what about Shifu and Hiku who are just standing at the door right there…
Lemon: WHO THE HELL ARE THEY?!
IlluZhion: One second, I need to talk to them…
Fiery: Sayonara, plot armor…STOP MESSING WITH MY VOICE LINES
osc: and you’re having another stroke…
IlluZhion: Just shut up Fiery, I need to chat with ‘em…
Hiku-chan: Hey IlluZhion-san~
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! WHY ARE YOU TALKING TO MY ILLUZHION LIKE THAT?!
Shifu: Oh, you don’t know? Uh, move along, cat girl, he’s my husband…
Lemon: WWWWWWWWWWWWW- WHAT?!
Fiery: ah crap lol more conflict…i swear man i’m going to commit manslaughter
osc: STOP HAVING A STROKE, JESUS CHRIST!
Lemon: HOW DARE YOU ATTEMPT TO SEDUCE MY ILLUZHION!!!
Hiku-chan: You sure you wanna fight me, feline?!
*Hiku-chan’s lost eye glows*
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! YOU ONLY HAVE ONE EYE!!!
Hiku-chan: And I have a power that bests your own. Leave my husband alone.
Lemon: Grrrrrrrrr…
Shifu: YOUR HUSBAND?! HE LOVES ME MORE!!!
Lemon: BOTH OF YOU ARE WRONG!!! HE LOVES ME THE MOST!!!
IlluZhion: Oh boy, more conflict…
Cosmo: Well at least try to stop your wives from fighting, dude…
Popplio: Why does polygamy always end this way…?
Ralsei: HUH?!
Popplio: Oh nevermind...
Ralsei: EXACTLY BITCH!!!
Fiery: Pssst guys, let’s just go without them, they will never stop at this pace.
Lemon: Fine, we’re going…
Hiku-chan: Keep your hands off him, both of you…
Shifu and Lemon: …
Fiery: So we going now? After 8 million years? Good, let’s go.
Back at home…
*VOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*
Hiku-chan: A power outage? What the hell is going on here?!
IlluZhion: Let’s go check the power…
Lemon: I’m going with you…
Fiery: Why are we checking the power instead of finding a way out of this labyrinth of buildings?
xrunner: Well IlluZhion’s plan does sound better, in all fairness…
Shifu: Why don’t we all go?
In the basement…
Hiku-chan: This place gives me trauma from somewhere…
Shifu: Don’t think about that…
Lemon: Well I’m going with IlluZhion, you simps better find someone else to leech onto…
Fiery: I’m not going inside here.
Nudge: Cry about it, we’re all going in.
Fiery: you know what i dont care about your opinion on it i’m not going inside i’m running away and probably encountering the zombies but i dont give a crap since its better than staying with you barnacles!
IlluZhion: Let’s just go…
Fiery: Jeez, you don’t have to be this stoic… OK FINE I’M GOING… I want to kill myself right now…
osc: Dude, it’s just a prank… Calm down…
Fiery: I mean going in this dark place. Did I ever tell you I had a fear of the dark? That’s why I had this lighter.
Dark: Am I a joke to you?
Fiery: yes in fact you are all you do in this story is be a fortnite fanboy go catch a victory royale or some shit
IlluZhion: Stop arguing, the lot of you… Let’s go…
Fiery: holy crap i’ve turned into what i want to destroy most…I HATE YOU SCRIPT WRITER! (i mean myself)
At the branching paths…
Hiku-chan: What the hell? How big is this place?
osc: By the looks of it, it’s so big you could make this place into a bunker…
Shifu: Better than the one me and Hiku were stuck in for hours… Wait, come to think of it that’s when we fell for IlluZhion…
IlluZhion: Let’s split into groups… Me, Hiku-chan, Shifu, Lemon and Fiery are going one way…
Nudge: Obviously you go with all the girls…
osc: Well Fiery’s a dude…
Nudge: I’m not blind…
IlluZhion: Nudge, osc and the others go the other way…
xrunner: I’mma go my own way… I can noclip my way in…
Fiery: No thank you…*runs out the door*
IlluZhion: Ok, both of you can go your way…
Lemon: Let’s get going then…
Hiku-chan: Don’t this remind you of somethin’? Like…
IlluZhion: The Catacombs? Nah, not really.
Shifu: Well of course, you ARE a vampire…
Lemon: Wait I just noticed something… You two aren’t vampires… You sure you’re married to IlluZhion?
Hiku-chan: Well the thing is… Both me and Shifu are phantoms…
Lemon: Uhhh…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Can you guys go on instead of having this chit chat?
Hiku-chan: Gah, fine…
Lemon: Welp, lookee here…
Hiku-chan: How on earth are we gonna get up THERE?!
Lemon: That’s the thing, me and IlluZhion are gonna go up there. You guys just look about below, ok?
Fiery in a muffled voice: How about you guys actually go back instead of having this shit?
IlluZhion: No goddamn way. This is my- correction, OUR city. We ain’t leavin’ till the very end…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Well, okay, see ya.
Shifu: What a coward…
Fiery: HEARD THAT! FINE IF YOU WANT ME DOWN THERE THEN FINE YOU PIECES OF SHIT.
Shifu: No, coward, you go cry about it…
Fiery: OK THAT’S IT…
*Fiery just runs off shouting “FUCK YOU DIPSHITS”*
Hiku-chan: What?
Lemon: Like we can’t hear that…
IlluZhion: Lemon, let’s just get going…
Lemon: Okie~
Meanwhile…
Nudge: Urrrgggh, just thinking about this place makes me irk…
Popplio: At least there aren’t any dogs h-
*WOOF WOOF*
Popplio: AAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRGH!
Nudge: Oops, sorry, just my MP3 player sound effect 😛
Popplio: WHAT?!
osc: Stop it, both of you. Let’s get going…
K: I agree, we can’t afford to lose anyone else, like what happened with Cringeh…
Cosmo: Oh, like anyone cares about him! Let’s just move on…
Elsewhere…
xrunner: Whew, I’m almost there…
*BRAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNSSSS…*
xrunner: Fuck that, I’m go-
*He can’t noclip through the terrain*
xrunner: Ah bollocks…
Cringeh?: Urrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhh…
xrunner: WHAT THE FUCK?! CRINGEH?!
Huge Zombie: Reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnggggggge… Geeeeeeettt reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnggggggge…
xrunner: Fuck this shit, I’m running away…
*One of the zombies bites xrunner*
xrunner: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Also elsewhere…
Fiery: Man I actually feel kind of bad…
*Clanking noises*
Nudge: WHAT?! DON’T TELL ME THE ZOMBIES FOUND US AS WELL!
*Ceiling burns away*
Fiery: WOAAAAHH! Dang it, should have known that this city was still in construction.
Dark: What the fuck are you doing here, Fiery? I thought you chickened out…
Fiery: I thought you were getting one of those bitch Victory Royales…
Dark: THE FUCK DID YOU SAY?!
Fiery: It’s not chicken to do something that is reasonable. But I guess I interrupted you having a victory royale, so yay.
Dark: Oh you are going to-
osc: Listen its not worth it
Back with IlluZhion…
Lemon: This is kinda cute… You, me, this complete darkness…
IlluZhion: Heh, ya think so?
Lemon: Just c’mere and-
*Kissing*
Hiku-chan: What the fuck? Are they kissing AGAIN?!
Shifu: Sounds like it… Let’s go, Hiku…
IlluZhion: Oh my gosh, you’re so-
*Kissing continues*
Script writer: Ok, can you actually stop?
IlluZhion: NO!
*Kissing*
Script writer: Honestly…
Shifu: Didn’t the script writer literally just tell them to stop? Ok, let’s roll…
xrunner?: BRAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSS…
Hiku-chan: Lol, we can’t even get bitten…
Shifu: Oh yeah, this armor…
*They just walk through like nothing happened*
You got catfished. That implicates Shifu and Hiku not existing, being like the "incels" we talked about for so long. That implicates they could be a 63 year old man that actually framed all of us. And you still kissed them? Ew. I find that episode to be overly cringeh (welcome back !), I'm sorry but it was actually hard to read it, impossible to keep a straight face. I understand what you wanted to do, but nah, the execution was poor.
First off it's not even confirmed that Lemon likes you back. So basically you're writing fanfic episodes where you kiss someone that basically does not like you back. Imagine if I had a crush on Jey. I would not write episodes where we kiss, since he does not like me back ? That's so weird... Basically throughout the episode she's so protective of you and kisses you every 2 seconds... but in real life she may just see you as a friend ? Or maybe be irked at you ? You're always telling me "she got shy". She just didn't respond to those texts. Maybe she's disgusted by them, but as the polite person she is, she just avoid the discussion.
So maybe Lemon is irked at you and you're still kissing throughout the episode.
That brings us to the character of Lemon as a whole. I find her to be so fake and unrealistic every time YOU are writing. You're always making Lemon so protective over you, saying she loves you, clearly having a crush over you, being brutal for you, a badass girl and an edgelord... in real life she's a polite girl who speaks Japanese and responds to anything in the nicest way possible. It's like if one fanfic made my overall character a misogynistic person... it's not because it's what you would like the person to be, that you have to change the person. Enhancing some traits to make the character more interesting is okay, but at this point it is hardly Lemon.
That brings us to the very usage of Hiku and Shifu in this fanfic. They are non-existent. They are the incels all along. So why does Shifu says out of nowhere "he's my husband" ??? Bro you're talking about PDC_Cosmo, duragjamal, etc. Do you want to be their husband ? Ew. No. Even if it's all fictional, seeing it as someone who knows the story is disturbing. And it's cringe. Marriage implicated in a fanfic that is addressed towards young kids ? I was 9 when I entered this, if I saw that at 9...
I'm sorry, it's just too mushy. Sometimes it's incredible how the theming of the zombies has became secondary. Like... Cringeh's getting kidnapped? OK, you all hate him, but the little amount of emphasis put about it is incredibly low. You focus more on kissing Lemon and in the annoying love square track between Hiku, Shifu, Lemon and you. It is the primary element of this episode. Cringeh has been kidnapped and nobody cares. Everything that matters is lovey lovey lovey dovey dovey dovey...
I'm sorry. It's just too cringe to my taste.
Dude, the guy literally just confessed to killing both of them...
And as for Lemon... I still have no idea why I just make her like this... I agree, it's unrealistic
I disagree, they told me that Shifu and Hiku didn't exist, and maybe they're framing me but it sounded more believable than usual... anyways, is that a good reason to mention them as your husband ? Even if they did exist, you never got married... even if that would be your plans for the future ?
You're 14 bro ? Getting married ?
On 2023-02-02 at 17:45:30
Again, why are people giving free facepalms ? Nobody facepalmed Pianta or Dietsoda when they asked to join my fanfic.
1On 2023-02-01 at 23:13:49
EP4 PART 1 - The Power Outage
After a long night of partying and getting drunk, Fiery and co. decide to escape the city after 1 day of sleep deprivation.
Lemon: I’m strooooooooooonggg as an oooniiiiiiiii…
IlluZhion: Remiiiiiiiiiinds me of the tiiiiiiiiiiiiiime I plaaaaaaaayed Touuuuuuhouuuuu Proooooject and I had to fiiiiiiight Suiiiiiiikaaaaaaaaaaa…
Lemon: Ah, screeeew thaaaaaaat, let’s-
*Kissing*
Fiery: Bruh… What the fuck?
Cringeh: dhdshjhkjhwefhuefnsfhsfshfksak
???: Mind if you shut your mouth, bitch?
osc: Innit man this guy keeps on blabbering about what he did for his maths homework like my guy shut your mouth for 1 second
Fiery: oh crap why’s ralsei here man NAWWWWWW
Ralsei: Cry about it bitch
Fiery: I will turn your skin into a coat. Anyways, we really need to escape this place, our heads are on the line.
IlluZhion: Iiiiiiii’mma caaaaaaarryyyyyy Leeeeeeeeemoooooon, she’s toooooo druuuuuuuuuunk to go alooooooooone…
xrunner: Ain’t no way man, you’re also drunk as hell…
Ralsei: Honestly bro, these two are seriously weird…
IlluZhion: Noooooooooooooo weeeeeeeee’re noooooooot…
Fiery: Dude, you literally gave your own girlfriend 5 gallons of sake… Hey, stop tampering with my voice lines!
IlluZhion: Hahahahahahahahahaha, no waaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy, maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan…
osc: are you having a stroke
Cringeh: AAAAAAAAAA
Zombies: We’ll be taking him.
Lemon: Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww- what?! WHO?! NO-ONE DID A THING!
Fiery: Oh good riddance, he’s a party pooper. Nobody cares about him that much anyway, just a nerd.
Popplio: At least he’s not a dog
Fiery: Kind of wish he was, then he wouldn’t be able to speak so much.
xrunner: Hey while you guys were chatting I got the secret Green Hill Zone level
IlluZhion: NOBODY CARES, CRINGEH COULD DIE!!! But to be fair, I did kind of hate him…
Lemon: Wait, was I drunk?! WHY AM I HALF-
osc: Put your hand up if you cared about him. See, nobody except you two care.
Fiery: you don’t have hands…
osc: that’s still a no for caring about him
IlluZhion: I didn’t even give two shits… So long as my Lemon is safe, I just acted like I cared lol
Fiery: what about Shifu and Hiku who are just standing at the door right there…
Lemon: WHO THE HELL ARE THEY?!
IlluZhion: One second, I need to talk to them…
Fiery: Sayonara, plot armor…STOP MESSING WITH MY VOICE LINES
osc: and you’re having another stroke…
IlluZhion: Just shut up Fiery, I need to chat with ‘em…
Hiku-chan: Hey IlluZhion-san~
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! WHY ARE YOU TALKING TO MY ILLUZHION LIKE THAT?!
Shifu: Oh, you don’t know? Uh, move along, cat girl, he’s my husband…
Lemon: WWWWWWWWWWWWW- WHAT?!
Fiery: ah crap lol more conflict…i swear man i’m going to commit manslaughter
osc: STOP HAVING A STROKE, JESUS CHRIST!
Lemon: HOW DARE YOU ATTEMPT TO SEDUCE MY ILLUZHION!!!
Hiku-chan: You sure you wanna fight me, feline?!
*Hiku-chan’s lost eye glows*
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! YOU ONLY HAVE ONE EYE!!!
Hiku-chan: And I have a power that bests your own. Leave my husband alone.
Lemon: Grrrrrrrrr…
Shifu: YOUR HUSBAND?! HE LOVES ME MORE!!!
Lemon: BOTH OF YOU ARE WRONG!!! HE LOVES ME THE MOST!!!
IlluZhion: Oh boy, more conflict…
Cosmo: Well at least try to stop your wives from fighting, dude…
Popplio: Why does polygamy always end this way…?
Ralsei: HUH?!
Popplio: Oh nevermind...
Ralsei: EXACTLY BITCH!!!
Fiery: Pssst guys, let’s just go without them, they will never stop at this pace.
Lemon: Fine, we’re going…
Hiku-chan: Keep your hands off him, both of you…
Shifu and Lemon: …
Fiery: So we going now? After 8 million years? Good, let’s go.
Back at home…
*VOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*
Hiku-chan: A power outage? What the hell is going on here?!
IlluZhion: Let’s go check the power…
Lemon: I’m going with you…
Fiery: Why are we checking the power instead of finding a way out of this labyrinth of buildings?
xrunner: Well IlluZhion’s plan does sound better, in all fairness…
Shifu: Why don’t we all go?
In the basement…
Hiku-chan: This place gives me trauma from somewhere…
Shifu: Don’t think about that…
Lemon: Well I’m going with IlluZhion, you simps better find someone else to leech onto…
Fiery: I’m not going inside here.
Nudge: Cry about it, we’re all going in.
Fiery: you know what i dont care about your opinion on it i’m not going inside i’m running away and probably encountering the zombies but i dont give a crap since its better than staying with you barnacles!
IlluZhion: Let’s just go…
Fiery: Jeez, you don’t have to be this stoic… OK FINE I’M GOING… I want to kill myself right now…
osc: Dude, it’s just a prank… Calm down…
Fiery: I mean going in this dark place. Did I ever tell you I had a fear of the dark? That’s why I had this lighter.
Dark: Am I a joke to you?
Fiery: yes in fact you are all you do in this story is be a fortnite fanboy go catch a victory royale or some shit
IlluZhion: Stop arguing, the lot of you… Let’s go…
Fiery: holy crap i’ve turned into what i want to destroy most…I HATE YOU SCRIPT WRITER! (i mean myself)
At the branching paths…
Hiku-chan: What the hell? How big is this place?
osc: By the looks of it, it’s so big you could make this place into a bunker…
Shifu: Better than the one me and Hiku were stuck in for hours… Wait, come to think of it that’s when we fell for IlluZhion…
IlluZhion: Let’s split into groups… Me, Hiku-chan, Shifu, Lemon and Fiery are going one way…
Nudge: Obviously you go with all the girls…
osc: Well Fiery’s a dude…
Nudge: I’m not blind…
IlluZhion: Nudge, osc and the others go the other way…
xrunner: I’mma go my own way… I can noclip my way in…
Fiery: No thank you…*runs out the door*
IlluZhion: Ok, both of you can go your way…
Lemon: Let’s get going then…
Hiku-chan: Don’t this remind you of somethin’? Like…
IlluZhion: The Catacombs? Nah, not really.
Shifu: Well of course, you ARE a vampire…
Lemon: Wait I just noticed something… You two aren’t vampires… You sure you’re married to IlluZhion?
Hiku-chan: Well the thing is… Both me and Shifu are phantoms…
Lemon: Uhhh…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Can you guys go on instead of having this chit chat?
Hiku-chan: Gah, fine…
Lemon: Welp, lookee here…
Hiku-chan: How on earth are we gonna get up THERE?!
Lemon: That’s the thing, me and IlluZhion are gonna go up there. You guys just look about below, ok?
Fiery in a muffled voice: How about you guys actually go back instead of having this shit?
IlluZhion: No goddamn way. This is my- correction, OUR city. We ain’t leavin’ till the very end…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Well, okay, see ya.
Shifu: What a coward…
Fiery: HEARD THAT! FINE IF YOU WANT ME DOWN THERE THEN FINE YOU PIECES OF SHIT.
Shifu: No, coward, you go cry about it…
Fiery: OK THAT’S IT…
*Fiery just runs off shouting “FUCK YOU DIPSHITS”*
Hiku-chan: What?
Lemon: Like we can’t hear that…
IlluZhion: Lemon, let’s just get going…
Lemon: Okie~
Meanwhile…
Nudge: Urrrgggh, just thinking about this place makes me irk…
Popplio: At least there aren’t any dogs h-
*WOOF WOOF*
Popplio: AAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRGH!
Nudge: Oops, sorry, just my MP3 player sound effect 😛
Popplio: WHAT?!
osc: Stop it, both of you. Let’s get going…
K: I agree, we can’t afford to lose anyone else, like what happened with Cringeh…
Cosmo: Oh, like anyone cares about him! Let’s just move on…
Elsewhere…
xrunner: Whew, I’m almost there…
*BRAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNSSSS…*
xrunner: Fuck that, I’m go-
*He can’t noclip through the terrain*
xrunner: Ah bollocks…
Cringeh?: Urrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhh…
xrunner: WHAT THE FUCK?! CRINGEH?!
Huge Zombie: Reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnggggggge… Geeeeeeettt reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnggggggge…
xrunner: Fuck this shit, I’m running away…
*One of the zombies bites xrunner*
xrunner: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Also elsewhere…
Fiery: Man I actually feel kind of bad…
*Clanking noises*
Nudge: WHAT?! DON’T TELL ME THE ZOMBIES FOUND US AS WELL!
*Ceiling burns away*
Fiery: WOAAAAHH! Dang it, should have known that this city was still in construction.
Dark: What the fuck are you doing here, Fiery? I thought you chickened out…
Fiery: I thought you were getting one of those bitch Victory Royales…
Dark: THE FUCK DID YOU SAY?!
Fiery: It’s not chicken to do something that is reasonable. But I guess I interrupted you having a victory royale, so yay.
Dark: Oh you are going to-
osc: Listen its not worth it
Back with IlluZhion…
Lemon: This is kinda cute… You, me, this complete darkness…
IlluZhion: Heh, ya think so?
Lemon: Just c’mere and-
*Kissing*
Hiku-chan: What the fuck? Are they kissing AGAIN?!
Shifu: Sounds like it… Let’s go, Hiku…
IlluZhion: Oh my gosh, you’re so-
*Kissing continues*
Script writer: Ok, can you actually stop?
IlluZhion: NO!
*Kissing*
Script writer: Honestly…
Shifu: Didn’t the script writer literally just tell them to stop? Ok, let’s roll…
xrunner?: BRAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSS…
Hiku-chan: Lol, we can’t even get bitten…
Shifu: Oh yeah, this armor…
*They just walk through like nothing happened*
After a long night of partying and getting drunk, Fiery and co. decide to escape the city after 1 day of sleep deprivation.
Lemon: I’m strooooooooooonggg as an oooniiiiiiiii…
IlluZhion: Remiiiiiiiiiinds me of the tiiiiiiiiiiiiiime I plaaaaaaaayed Touuuuuuhouuuuu Proooooject and I had to fiiiiiiight Suiiiiiiikaaaaaaaaaaa…
Lemon: Ah, screeeew thaaaaaaat, let’s-
*Kissing*
Fiery: Bruh… What the fuck?
Cringeh: dhdshjhkjhwefhuefnsfhsfshfksak
???: Mind if you shut your mouth, bitch?
osc: Innit man this guy keeps on blabbering about what he did for his maths homework like my guy shut your mouth for 1 second
Fiery: oh crap why’s ralsei here man NAWWWWWW
Ralsei: Cry about it bitch
Fiery: I will turn your skin into a coat. Anyways, we really need to escape this place, our heads are on the line.
IlluZhion: Iiiiiiii’mma caaaaaaarryyyyyy Leeeeeeeeemoooooon, she’s toooooo druuuuuuuuuunk to go alooooooooone…
xrunner: Ain’t no way man, you’re also drunk as hell…
Ralsei: Honestly bro, these two are seriously weird…
IlluZhion: Noooooooooooooo weeeeeeeee’re noooooooot…
Fiery: Dude, you literally gave your own girlfriend 5 gallons of sake… Hey, stop tampering with my voice lines!
IlluZhion: Hahahahahahahahahaha, no waaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy, maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan…
osc: are you having a stroke
Cringeh: AAAAAAAAAA
Zombies: We’ll be taking him.
Lemon: Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww- what?! WHO?! NO-ONE DID A THING!
Fiery: Oh good riddance, he’s a party pooper. Nobody cares about him that much anyway, just a nerd.
Popplio: At least he’s not a dog
Fiery: Kind of wish he was, then he wouldn’t be able to speak so much.
xrunner: Hey while you guys were chatting I got the secret Green Hill Zone level
IlluZhion: NOBODY CARES, CRINGEH COULD DIE!!! But to be fair, I did kind of hate him…
Lemon: Wait, was I drunk?! WHY AM I HALF-
osc: Put your hand up if you cared about him. See, nobody except you two care.
Fiery: you don’t have hands…
osc: that’s still a no for caring about him
IlluZhion: I didn’t even give two shits… So long as my Lemon is safe, I just acted like I cared lol
Fiery: what about Shifu and Hiku who are just standing at the door right there…
Lemon: WHO THE HELL ARE THEY?!
IlluZhion: One second, I need to talk to them…
Fiery: Sayonara, plot armor…STOP MESSING WITH MY VOICE LINES
osc: and you’re having another stroke…
IlluZhion: Just shut up Fiery, I need to chat with ‘em…
Hiku-chan: Hey IlluZhion-san~
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! WHY ARE YOU TALKING TO MY ILLUZHION LIKE THAT?!
Shifu: Oh, you don’t know? Uh, move along, cat girl, he’s my husband…
Lemon: WWWWWWWWWWWWW- WHAT?!
Fiery: ah crap lol more conflict…i swear man i’m going to commit manslaughter
osc: STOP HAVING A STROKE, JESUS CHRIST!
Lemon: HOW DARE YOU ATTEMPT TO SEDUCE MY ILLUZHION!!!
Hiku-chan: You sure you wanna fight me, feline?!
*Hiku-chan’s lost eye glows*
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! YOU ONLY HAVE ONE EYE!!!
Hiku-chan: And I have a power that bests your own. Leave my husband alone.
Lemon: Grrrrrrrrr…
Shifu: YOUR HUSBAND?! HE LOVES ME MORE!!!
Lemon: BOTH OF YOU ARE WRONG!!! HE LOVES ME THE MOST!!!
IlluZhion: Oh boy, more conflict…
Cosmo: Well at least try to stop your wives from fighting, dude…
Popplio: Why does polygamy always end this way…?
Ralsei: HUH?!
Popplio: Oh nevermind...
Ralsei: EXACTLY BITCH!!!
Fiery: Pssst guys, let’s just go without them, they will never stop at this pace.
Lemon: Fine, we’re going…
Hiku-chan: Keep your hands off him, both of you…
Shifu and Lemon: …
Fiery: So we going now? After 8 million years? Good, let’s go.
Back at home…
*VOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*
Hiku-chan: A power outage? What the hell is going on here?!
IlluZhion: Let’s go check the power…
Lemon: I’m going with you…
Fiery: Why are we checking the power instead of finding a way out of this labyrinth of buildings?
xrunner: Well IlluZhion’s plan does sound better, in all fairness…
Shifu: Why don’t we all go?
In the basement…
Hiku-chan: This place gives me trauma from somewhere…
Shifu: Don’t think about that…
Lemon: Well I’m going with IlluZhion, you simps better find someone else to leech onto…
Fiery: I’m not going inside here.
Nudge: Cry about it, we’re all going in.
Fiery: you know what i dont care about your opinion on it i’m not going inside i’m running away and probably encountering the zombies but i dont give a crap since its better than staying with you barnacles!
IlluZhion: Let’s just go…
Fiery: Jeez, you don’t have to be this stoic… OK FINE I’M GOING… I want to kill myself right now…
osc: Dude, it’s just a prank… Calm down…
Fiery: I mean going in this dark place. Did I ever tell you I had a fear of the dark? That’s why I had this lighter.
Dark: Am I a joke to you?
Fiery: yes in fact you are all you do in this story is be a fortnite fanboy go catch a victory royale or some shit
IlluZhion: Stop arguing, the lot of you… Let’s go…
Fiery: holy crap i’ve turned into what i want to destroy most…I HATE YOU SCRIPT WRITER! (i mean myself)
At the branching paths…
Hiku-chan: What the hell? How big is this place?
osc: By the looks of it, it’s so big you could make this place into a bunker…
Shifu: Better than the one me and Hiku were stuck in for hours… Wait, come to think of it that’s when we fell for IlluZhion…
IlluZhion: Let’s split into groups… Me, Hiku-chan, Shifu, Lemon and Fiery are going one way…
Nudge: Obviously you go with all the girls…
osc: Well Fiery’s a dude…
Nudge: I’m not blind…
IlluZhion: Nudge, osc and the others go the other way…
xrunner: I’mma go my own way… I can noclip my way in…
Fiery: No thank you…*runs out the door*
IlluZhion: Ok, both of you can go your way…
Lemon: Let’s get going then…
Hiku-chan: Don’t this remind you of somethin’? Like…
IlluZhion: The Catacombs? Nah, not really.
Shifu: Well of course, you ARE a vampire…
Lemon: Wait I just noticed something… You two aren’t vampires… You sure you’re married to IlluZhion?
Hiku-chan: Well the thing is… Both me and Shifu are phantoms…
Lemon: Uhhh…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Can you guys go on instead of having this chit chat?
Hiku-chan: Gah, fine…
Lemon: Welp, lookee here…
Hiku-chan: How on earth are we gonna get up THERE?!
Lemon: That’s the thing, me and IlluZhion are gonna go up there. You guys just look about below, ok?
Fiery in a muffled voice: How about you guys actually go back instead of having this shit?
IlluZhion: No goddamn way. This is my- correction, OUR city. We ain’t leavin’ till the very end…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Well, okay, see ya.
Shifu: What a coward…
Fiery: HEARD THAT! FINE IF YOU WANT ME DOWN THERE THEN FINE YOU PIECES OF SHIT.
Shifu: No, coward, you go cry about it…
Fiery: OK THAT’S IT…
*Fiery just runs off shouting “FUCK YOU DIPSHITS”*
Hiku-chan: What?
Lemon: Like we can’t hear that…
IlluZhion: Lemon, let’s just get going…
Lemon: Okie~
Meanwhile…
Nudge: Urrrgggh, just thinking about this place makes me irk…
Popplio: At least there aren’t any dogs h-
*WOOF WOOF*
Popplio: AAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRGH!
Nudge: Oops, sorry, just my MP3 player sound effect 😛
Popplio: WHAT?!
osc: Stop it, both of you. Let’s get going…
K: I agree, we can’t afford to lose anyone else, like what happened with Cringeh…
Cosmo: Oh, like anyone cares about him! Let’s just move on…
Elsewhere…
xrunner: Whew, I’m almost there…
*BRAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNSSSS…*
xrunner: Fuck that, I’m go-
*He can’t noclip through the terrain*
xrunner: Ah bollocks…
Cringeh?: Urrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhh…
xrunner: WHAT THE FUCK?! CRINGEH?!
Huge Zombie: Reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnggggggge… Geeeeeeettt reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnggggggge…
xrunner: Fuck this shit, I’m running away…
*One of the zombies bites xrunner*
xrunner: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Also elsewhere…
Fiery: Man I actually feel kind of bad…
*Clanking noises*
Nudge: WHAT?! DON’T TELL ME THE ZOMBIES FOUND US AS WELL!
*Ceiling burns away*
Fiery: WOAAAAHH! Dang it, should have known that this city was still in construction.
Dark: What the fuck are you doing here, Fiery? I thought you chickened out…
Fiery: I thought you were getting one of those bitch Victory Royales…
Dark: THE FUCK DID YOU SAY?!
Fiery: It’s not chicken to do something that is reasonable. But I guess I interrupted you having a victory royale, so yay.
Dark: Oh you are going to-
osc: Listen its not worth it
Back with IlluZhion…
Lemon: This is kinda cute… You, me, this complete darkness…
IlluZhion: Heh, ya think so?
Lemon: Just c’mere and-
*Kissing*
Hiku-chan: What the fuck? Are they kissing AGAIN?!
Shifu: Sounds like it… Let’s go, Hiku…
IlluZhion: Oh my gosh, you’re so-
*Kissing continues*
Script writer: Ok, can you actually stop?
IlluZhion: NO!
*Kissing*
Script writer: Honestly…
Shifu: Didn’t the script writer literally just tell them to stop? Ok, let’s roll…
xrunner?: BRAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSS…
Hiku-chan: Lol, we can’t even get bitten…
Shifu: Oh yeah, this armor…
*They just walk through like nothing happened*
You got catfished. That implicates Shifu and Hiku not existing, being like the "incels" we talked about for so long. That implicates they could be a 63 year old man that actually framed all of us. And you still kissed them? Ew. I find that episode to be overly cringeh (welcome back !), I'm sorry but it was actually hard to read it, impossible to keep a straight face. I understand what you wanted to do, but nah, the execution was poor.
First off it's not even confirmed that Lemon likes you back. So basically you're writing fanfic episodes where you kiss someone that basically does not like you back. Imagine if I had a crush on Jey. I would not write episodes where we kiss, since he does not like me back ? That's so weird... Basically throughout the episode she's so protective of you and kisses you every 2 seconds... but in real life she may just see you as a friend ? Or maybe be irked at you ? You're always telling me "she got shy". She just didn't respond to those texts. Maybe she's disgusted by them, but as the polite person she is, she just avoid the discussion.
So maybe Lemon is irked at you and you're still kissing throughout the episode.
That brings us to the character of Lemon as a whole. I find her to be so fake and unrealistic every time YOU are writing. You're always making Lemon so protective over you, saying she loves you, clearly having a crush over you, being brutal for you, a badass girl and an edgelord... in real life she's a polite girl who speaks Japanese and responds to anything in the nicest way possible. It's like if one fanfic made my overall character a misogynistic person... it's not because it's what you would like the person to be, that you have to change the person. Enhancing some traits to make the character more interesting is okay, but at this point it is hardly Lemon.
That brings us to the very usage of Hiku and Shifu in this fanfic. They are non-existent. They are the incels all along. So why does Shifu says out of nowhere "he's my husband" ??? Bro you're talking about PDC_Cosmo, duragjamal, etc. Do you want to be their husband ? Ew. No. Even if it's all fictional, seeing it as someone who knows the story is disturbing. And it's cringe. Marriage implicated in a fanfic that is addressed towards young kids ? I was 9 when I entered this, if I saw that at 9...
I'm sorry, it's just too mushy. Sometimes it's incredible how the theming of the zombies has became secondary. Like... Cringeh's getting kidnapped? OK, you all hate him, but the little amount of emphasis put about it is incredibly low. You focus more on kissing Lemon and in the annoying love square track between Hiku, Shifu, Lemon and you. It is the primary element of this episode. Cringeh has been kidnapped and nobody cares. Everything that matters is lovey lovey lovey dovey dovey dovey...
I'm sorry. It's just too cringe to my taste.
Nice essay. Submit this as an essay assignment to your teacher
Yeah, sorry if it sounded like...
Uh...
"Na...gging", as someone said. I just thought this episode was very cringe and I wanted to detail a lot as to why, since constructive criticism is way better than just saying "this is good/bad" and leave the room after that. Because ti actually helps the person improve, instead of just saying there's a problem, without specifying what's the problem in the first place, but also how to fix it.
On 2023-02-01 at 23:10:05
EP4 PART 1 - The Power Outage
After a long night of partying and getting drunk, Fiery and co. decide to escape the city after 1 day of sleep deprivation.
Lemon: I’m strooooooooooonggg as an oooniiiiiiiii…
IlluZhion: Remiiiiiiiiiinds me of the tiiiiiiiiiiiiiime I plaaaaaaaayed Touuuuuuhouuuuu Proooooject and I had to fiiiiiiight Suiiiiiiikaaaaaaaaaaa…
Lemon: Ah, screeeew thaaaaaaat, let’s-
*Kissing*
Fiery: Bruh… What the fuck?
Cringeh: dhdshjhkjhwefhuefnsfhsfshfksak
???: Mind if you shut your mouth, bitch?
osc: Innit man this guy keeps on blabbering about what he did for his maths homework like my guy shut your mouth for 1 second
Fiery: oh crap why’s ralsei here man NAWWWWWW
Ralsei: Cry about it bitch
Fiery: I will turn your skin into a coat. Anyways, we really need to escape this place, our heads are on the line.
IlluZhion: Iiiiiiii’mma caaaaaaarryyyyyy Leeeeeeeeemoooooon, she’s toooooo druuuuuuuuuunk to go alooooooooone…
xrunner: Ain’t no way man, you’re also drunk as hell…
Ralsei: Honestly bro, these two are seriously weird…
IlluZhion: Noooooooooooooo weeeeeeeee’re noooooooot…
Fiery: Dude, you literally gave your own girlfriend 5 gallons of sake… Hey, stop tampering with my voice lines!
IlluZhion: Hahahahahahahahahaha, no waaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy, maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan…
osc: are you having a stroke
Cringeh: AAAAAAAAAA
Zombies: We’ll be taking him.
Lemon: Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww- what?! WHO?! NO-ONE DID A THING!
Fiery: Oh good riddance, he’s a party pooper. Nobody cares about him that much anyway, just a nerd.
Popplio: At least he’s not a dog
Fiery: Kind of wish he was, then he wouldn’t be able to speak so much.
xrunner: Hey while you guys were chatting I got the secret Green Hill Zone level
IlluZhion: NOBODY CARES, CRINGEH COULD DIE!!! But to be fair, I did kind of hate him…
Lemon: Wait, was I drunk?! WHY AM I HALF-
osc: Put your hand up if you cared about him. See, nobody except you two care.
Fiery: you don’t have hands…
osc: that’s still a no for caring about him
IlluZhion: I didn’t even give two shits… So long as my Lemon is safe, I just acted like I cared lol
Fiery: what about Shifu and Hiku who are just standing at the door right there…
Lemon: WHO THE HELL ARE THEY?!
IlluZhion: One second, I need to talk to them…
Fiery: Sayonara, plot armor…STOP MESSING WITH MY VOICE LINES
osc: and you’re having another stroke…
IlluZhion: Just shut up Fiery, I need to chat with ‘em…
Hiku-chan: Hey IlluZhion-san~
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! WHY ARE YOU TALKING TO MY ILLUZHION LIKE THAT?!
Shifu: Oh, you don’t know? Uh, move along, cat girl, he’s my husband…
Lemon: WWWWWWWWWWWWW- WHAT?!
Fiery: ah crap lol more conflict…i swear man i’m going to commit manslaughter
osc: STOP HAVING A STROKE, JESUS CHRIST!
Lemon: HOW DARE YOU ATTEMPT TO SEDUCE MY ILLUZHION!!!
Hiku-chan: You sure you wanna fight me, feline?!
*Hiku-chan’s lost eye glows*
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! YOU ONLY HAVE ONE EYE!!!
Hiku-chan: And I have a power that bests your own. Leave my husband alone.
Lemon: Grrrrrrrrr…
Shifu: YOUR HUSBAND?! HE LOVES ME MORE!!!
Lemon: BOTH OF YOU ARE WRONG!!! HE LOVES ME THE MOST!!!
IlluZhion: Oh boy, more conflict…
Cosmo: Well at least try to stop your wives from fighting, dude…
Popplio: Why does polygamy always end this way…?
Ralsei: HUH?!
Popplio: Oh nevermind...
Ralsei: EXACTLY BITCH!!!
Fiery: Pssst guys, let’s just go without them, they will never stop at this pace.
Lemon: Fine, we’re going…
Hiku-chan: Keep your hands off him, both of you…
Shifu and Lemon: …
Fiery: So we going now? After 8 million years? Good, let’s go.
Back at home…
*VOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*
Hiku-chan: A power outage? What the hell is going on here?!
IlluZhion: Let’s go check the power…
Lemon: I’m going with you…
Fiery: Why are we checking the power instead of finding a way out of this labyrinth of buildings?
xrunner: Well IlluZhion’s plan does sound better, in all fairness…
Shifu: Why don’t we all go?
In the basement…
Hiku-chan: This place gives me trauma from somewhere…
Shifu: Don’t think about that…
Lemon: Well I’m going with IlluZhion, you simps better find someone else to leech onto…
Fiery: I’m not going inside here.
Nudge: Cry about it, we’re all going in.
Fiery: you know what i dont care about your opinion on it i’m not going inside i’m running away and probably encountering the zombies but i dont give a crap since its better than staying with you barnacles!
IlluZhion: Let’s just go…
Fiery: Jeez, you don’t have to be this stoic… OK FINE I’M GOING… I want to kill myself right now…
osc: Dude, it’s just a prank… Calm down…
Fiery: I mean going in this dark place. Did I ever tell you I had a fear of the dark? That’s why I had this lighter.
Dark: Am I a joke to you?
Fiery: yes in fact you are all you do in this story is be a fortnite fanboy go catch a victory royale or some shit
IlluZhion: Stop arguing, the lot of you… Let’s go…
Fiery: holy crap i’ve turned into what i want to destroy most…I HATE YOU SCRIPT WRITER! (i mean myself)
At the branching paths…
Hiku-chan: What the hell? How big is this place?
osc: By the looks of it, it’s so big you could make this place into a bunker…
Shifu: Better than the one me and Hiku were stuck in for hours… Wait, come to think of it that’s when we fell for IlluZhion…
IlluZhion: Let’s split into groups… Me, Hiku-chan, Shifu, Lemon and Fiery are going one way…
Nudge: Obviously you go with all the girls…
osc: Well Fiery’s a dude…
Nudge: I’m not blind…
IlluZhion: Nudge, osc and the others go the other way…
xrunner: I’mma go my own way… I can noclip my way in…
Fiery: No thank you…*runs out the door*
IlluZhion: Ok, both of you can go your way…
Lemon: Let’s get going then…
Hiku-chan: Don’t this remind you of somethin’? Like…
IlluZhion: The Catacombs? Nah, not really.
Shifu: Well of course, you ARE a vampire…
Lemon: Wait I just noticed something… You two aren’t vampires… You sure you’re married to IlluZhion?
Hiku-chan: Well the thing is… Both me and Shifu are phantoms…
Lemon: Uhhh…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Can you guys go on instead of having this chit chat?
Hiku-chan: Gah, fine…
Lemon: Welp, lookee here…
Hiku-chan: How on earth are we gonna get up THERE?!
Lemon: That’s the thing, me and IlluZhion are gonna go up there. You guys just look about below, ok?
Fiery in a muffled voice: How about you guys actually go back instead of having this shit?
IlluZhion: No goddamn way. This is my- correction, OUR city. We ain’t leavin’ till the very end…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Well, okay, see ya.
Shifu: What a coward…
Fiery: HEARD THAT! FINE IF YOU WANT ME DOWN THERE THEN FINE YOU PIECES OF SHIT.
Shifu: No, coward, you go cry about it…
Fiery: OK THAT’S IT…
*Fiery just runs off shouting “FUCK YOU DIPSHITS”*
Hiku-chan: What?
Lemon: Like we can’t hear that…
IlluZhion: Lemon, let’s just get going…
Lemon: Okie~
Meanwhile…
Nudge: Urrrgggh, just thinking about this place makes me irk…
Popplio: At least there aren’t any dogs h-
*WOOF WOOF*
Popplio: AAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRGH!
Nudge: Oops, sorry, just my MP3 player sound effect 😛
Popplio: WHAT?!
osc: Stop it, both of you. Let’s get going…
K: I agree, we can’t afford to lose anyone else, like what happened with Cringeh…
Cosmo: Oh, like anyone cares about him! Let’s just move on…
Elsewhere…
xrunner: Whew, I’m almost there…
*BRAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNSSSS…*
xrunner: Fuck that, I’m go-
*He can’t noclip through the terrain*
xrunner: Ah bollocks…
Cringeh?: Urrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhh…
xrunner: WHAT THE FUCK?! CRINGEH?!
Huge Zombie: Reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnggggggge… Geeeeeeettt reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnggggggge…
xrunner: Fuck this shit, I’m running away…
*One of the zombies bites xrunner*
xrunner: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Also elsewhere…
Fiery: Man I actually feel kind of bad…
*Clanking noises*
Nudge: WHAT?! DON’T TELL ME THE ZOMBIES FOUND US AS WELL!
*Ceiling burns away*
Fiery: WOAAAAHH! Dang it, should have known that this city was still in construction.
Dark: What the fuck are you doing here, Fiery? I thought you chickened out…
Fiery: I thought you were getting one of those bitch Victory Royales…
Dark: THE FUCK DID YOU SAY?!
Fiery: It’s not chicken to do something that is reasonable. But I guess I interrupted you having a victory royale, so yay.
Dark: Oh you are going to-
osc: Listen its not worth it
Back with IlluZhion…
Lemon: This is kinda cute… You, me, this complete darkness…
IlluZhion: Heh, ya think so?
Lemon: Just c’mere and-
*Kissing*
Hiku-chan: What the fuck? Are they kissing AGAIN?!
Shifu: Sounds like it… Let’s go, Hiku…
IlluZhion: Oh my gosh, you’re so-
*Kissing continues*
Script writer: Ok, can you actually stop?
IlluZhion: NO!
*Kissing*
Script writer: Honestly…
Shifu: Didn’t the script writer literally just tell them to stop? Ok, let’s roll…
xrunner?: BRAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSS…
Hiku-chan: Lol, we can’t even get bitten…
Shifu: Oh yeah, this armor…
*They just walk through like nothing happened*
After a long night of partying and getting drunk, Fiery and co. decide to escape the city after 1 day of sleep deprivation.
Lemon: I’m strooooooooooonggg as an oooniiiiiiiii…
IlluZhion: Remiiiiiiiiiinds me of the tiiiiiiiiiiiiiime I plaaaaaaaayed Touuuuuuhouuuuu Proooooject and I had to fiiiiiiight Suiiiiiiikaaaaaaaaaaa…
Lemon: Ah, screeeew thaaaaaaat, let’s-
*Kissing*
Fiery: Bruh… What the fuck?
Cringeh: dhdshjhkjhwefhuefnsfhsfshfksak
???: Mind if you shut your mouth, bitch?
osc: Innit man this guy keeps on blabbering about what he did for his maths homework like my guy shut your mouth for 1 second
Fiery: oh crap why’s ralsei here man NAWWWWWW
Ralsei: Cry about it bitch
Fiery: I will turn your skin into a coat. Anyways, we really need to escape this place, our heads are on the line.
IlluZhion: Iiiiiiii’mma caaaaaaarryyyyyy Leeeeeeeeemoooooon, she’s toooooo druuuuuuuuuunk to go alooooooooone…
xrunner: Ain’t no way man, you’re also drunk as hell…
Ralsei: Honestly bro, these two are seriously weird…
IlluZhion: Noooooooooooooo weeeeeeeee’re noooooooot…
Fiery: Dude, you literally gave your own girlfriend 5 gallons of sake… Hey, stop tampering with my voice lines!
IlluZhion: Hahahahahahahahahaha, no waaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyy, maaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaan…
osc: are you having a stroke
Cringeh: AAAAAAAAAA
Zombies: We’ll be taking him.
Lemon: Wwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww- what?! WHO?! NO-ONE DID A THING!
Fiery: Oh good riddance, he’s a party pooper. Nobody cares about him that much anyway, just a nerd.
Popplio: At least he’s not a dog
Fiery: Kind of wish he was, then he wouldn’t be able to speak so much.
xrunner: Hey while you guys were chatting I got the secret Green Hill Zone level
IlluZhion: NOBODY CARES, CRINGEH COULD DIE!!! But to be fair, I did kind of hate him…
Lemon: Wait, was I drunk?! WHY AM I HALF-
osc: Put your hand up if you cared about him. See, nobody except you two care.
Fiery: you don’t have hands…
osc: that’s still a no for caring about him
IlluZhion: I didn’t even give two shits… So long as my Lemon is safe, I just acted like I cared lol
Fiery: what about Shifu and Hiku who are just standing at the door right there…
Lemon: WHO THE HELL ARE THEY?!
IlluZhion: One second, I need to talk to them…
Fiery: Sayonara, plot armor…STOP MESSING WITH MY VOICE LINES
osc: and you’re having another stroke…
IlluZhion: Just shut up Fiery, I need to chat with ‘em…
Hiku-chan: Hey IlluZhion-san~
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! WHY ARE YOU TALKING TO MY ILLUZHION LIKE THAT?!
Shifu: Oh, you don’t know? Uh, move along, cat girl, he’s my husband…
Lemon: WWWWWWWWWWWWW- WHAT?!
Fiery: ah crap lol more conflict…i swear man i’m going to commit manslaughter
osc: STOP HAVING A STROKE, JESUS CHRIST!
Lemon: HOW DARE YOU ATTEMPT TO SEDUCE MY ILLUZHION!!!
Hiku-chan: You sure you wanna fight me, feline?!
*Hiku-chan’s lost eye glows*
Lemon: WHAT THE HELL?! YOU ONLY HAVE ONE EYE!!!
Hiku-chan: And I have a power that bests your own. Leave my husband alone.
Lemon: Grrrrrrrrr…
Shifu: YOUR HUSBAND?! HE LOVES ME MORE!!!
Lemon: BOTH OF YOU ARE WRONG!!! HE LOVES ME THE MOST!!!
IlluZhion: Oh boy, more conflict…
Cosmo: Well at least try to stop your wives from fighting, dude…
Popplio: Why does polygamy always end this way…?
Ralsei: HUH?!
Popplio: Oh nevermind...
Ralsei: EXACTLY BITCH!!!
Fiery: Pssst guys, let’s just go without them, they will never stop at this pace.
Lemon: Fine, we’re going…
Hiku-chan: Keep your hands off him, both of you…
Shifu and Lemon: …
Fiery: So we going now? After 8 million years? Good, let’s go.
Back at home…
*VOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM*
Hiku-chan: A power outage? What the hell is going on here?!
IlluZhion: Let’s go check the power…
Lemon: I’m going with you…
Fiery: Why are we checking the power instead of finding a way out of this labyrinth of buildings?
xrunner: Well IlluZhion’s plan does sound better, in all fairness…
Shifu: Why don’t we all go?
In the basement…
Hiku-chan: This place gives me trauma from somewhere…
Shifu: Don’t think about that…
Lemon: Well I’m going with IlluZhion, you simps better find someone else to leech onto…
Fiery: I’m not going inside here.
Nudge: Cry about it, we’re all going in.
Fiery: you know what i dont care about your opinion on it i’m not going inside i’m running away and probably encountering the zombies but i dont give a crap since its better than staying with you barnacles!
IlluZhion: Let’s just go…
Fiery: Jeez, you don’t have to be this stoic… OK FINE I’M GOING… I want to kill myself right now…
osc: Dude, it’s just a prank… Calm down…
Fiery: I mean going in this dark place. Did I ever tell you I had a fear of the dark? That’s why I had this lighter.
Dark: Am I a joke to you?
Fiery: yes in fact you are all you do in this story is be a fortnite fanboy go catch a victory royale or some shit
IlluZhion: Stop arguing, the lot of you… Let’s go…
Fiery: holy crap i’ve turned into what i want to destroy most…I HATE YOU SCRIPT WRITER! (i mean myself)
At the branching paths…
Hiku-chan: What the hell? How big is this place?
osc: By the looks of it, it’s so big you could make this place into a bunker…
Shifu: Better than the one me and Hiku were stuck in for hours… Wait, come to think of it that’s when we fell for IlluZhion…
IlluZhion: Let’s split into groups… Me, Hiku-chan, Shifu, Lemon and Fiery are going one way…
Nudge: Obviously you go with all the girls…
osc: Well Fiery’s a dude…
Nudge: I’m not blind…
IlluZhion: Nudge, osc and the others go the other way…
xrunner: I’mma go my own way… I can noclip my way in…
Fiery: No thank you…*runs out the door*
IlluZhion: Ok, both of you can go your way…
Lemon: Let’s get going then…
Hiku-chan: Don’t this remind you of somethin’? Like…
IlluZhion: The Catacombs? Nah, not really.
Shifu: Well of course, you ARE a vampire…
Lemon: Wait I just noticed something… You two aren’t vampires… You sure you’re married to IlluZhion?
Hiku-chan: Well the thing is… Both me and Shifu are phantoms…
Lemon: Uhhh…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Can you guys go on instead of having this chit chat?
Hiku-chan: Gah, fine…
Lemon: Welp, lookee here…
Hiku-chan: How on earth are we gonna get up THERE?!
Lemon: That’s the thing, me and IlluZhion are gonna go up there. You guys just look about below, ok?
Fiery in a muffled voice: How about you guys actually go back instead of having this shit?
IlluZhion: No goddamn way. This is my- correction, OUR city. We ain’t leavin’ till the very end…
Fiery in a muffled voice: Well, okay, see ya.
Shifu: What a coward…
Fiery: HEARD THAT! FINE IF YOU WANT ME DOWN THERE THEN FINE YOU PIECES OF SHIT.
Shifu: No, coward, you go cry about it…
Fiery: OK THAT’S IT…
*Fiery just runs off shouting “FUCK YOU DIPSHITS”*
Hiku-chan: What?
Lemon: Like we can’t hear that…
IlluZhion: Lemon, let’s just get going…
Lemon: Okie~
Meanwhile…
Nudge: Urrrgggh, just thinking about this place makes me irk…
Popplio: At least there aren’t any dogs h-
*WOOF WOOF*
Popplio: AAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRGH!
Nudge: Oops, sorry, just my MP3 player sound effect 😛
Popplio: WHAT?!
osc: Stop it, both of you. Let’s get going…
K: I agree, we can’t afford to lose anyone else, like what happened with Cringeh…
Cosmo: Oh, like anyone cares about him! Let’s just move on…
Elsewhere…
xrunner: Whew, I’m almost there…
*BRAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNSSSS…*
xrunner: Fuck that, I’m go-
*He can’t noclip through the terrain*
xrunner: Ah bollocks…
Cringeh?: Urrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhh…
xrunner: WHAT THE FUCK?! CRINGEH?!
Huge Zombie: Reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnggggggge… Geeeeeeettt reveeeeeeeeennnnnnnnnggggggge…
xrunner: Fuck this shit, I’m running away…
*One of the zombies bites xrunner*
xrunner: GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
Also elsewhere…
Fiery: Man I actually feel kind of bad…
*Clanking noises*
Nudge: WHAT?! DON’T TELL ME THE ZOMBIES FOUND US AS WELL!
*Ceiling burns away*
Fiery: WOAAAAHH! Dang it, should have known that this city was still in construction.
Dark: What the fuck are you doing here, Fiery? I thought you chickened out…
Fiery: I thought you were getting one of those bitch Victory Royales…
Dark: THE FUCK DID YOU SAY?!
Fiery: It’s not chicken to do something that is reasonable. But I guess I interrupted you having a victory royale, so yay.
Dark: Oh you are going to-
osc: Listen its not worth it
Back with IlluZhion…
Lemon: This is kinda cute… You, me, this complete darkness…
IlluZhion: Heh, ya think so?
Lemon: Just c’mere and-
*Kissing*
Hiku-chan: What the fuck? Are they kissing AGAIN?!
Shifu: Sounds like it… Let’s go, Hiku…
IlluZhion: Oh my gosh, you’re so-
*Kissing continues*
Script writer: Ok, can you actually stop?
IlluZhion: NO!
*Kissing*
Script writer: Honestly…
Shifu: Didn’t the script writer literally just tell them to stop? Ok, let’s roll…
xrunner?: BRAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNSSSSSS…
Hiku-chan: Lol, we can’t even get bitten…
Shifu: Oh yeah, this armor…
*They just walk through like nothing happened*
You got catfished. That implicates Shifu and Hiku not existing, being like the "incels" we talked about for so long. That implicates they could be a 63 year old man that actually framed all of us. And you still kissed them? Ew. I find that episode to be overly cringeh (welcome back !), I'm sorry but it was actually hard to read it, impossible to keep a straight face. I understand what you wanted to do, but nah, the execution was poor.
First off it's not even confirmed that Lemon likes you back. So basically you're writing fanfic episodes where you kiss someone that basically does not like you back. Imagine if I had a crush on Jey. I would not write episodes where we kiss, since he does not like me back ? That's so weird... Basically throughout the episode she's so protective of you and kisses you every 2 seconds... but in real life she may just see you as a friend ? Or maybe be irked at you ? You're always telling me "she got shy". She just didn't respond to those texts. Maybe she's disgusted by them, but as the polite person she is, she just avoid the discussion.
So maybe Lemon is irked at you and you're still kissing throughout the episode.
That brings us to the character of Lemon as a whole. I find her to be so fake and unrealistic every time YOU are writing. You're always making Lemon so protective over you, saying she loves you, clearly having a crush over you, being brutal for you, a badass girl and an edgelord... in real life she's a polite girl who speaks Japanese and responds to anything in the nicest way possible. It's like if one fanfic made my overall character a misogynistic person... it's not because it's what you would like the person to be, that you have to change the person. Enhancing some traits to make the character more interesting is okay, but at this point it is hardly Lemon.
That brings us to the very usage of Hiku and Shifu in this fanfic. They are non-existent. They are the incels all along. So why does Shifu says out of nowhere "he's my husband" ??? Bro you're talking about PDC_Cosmo, duragjamal, etc. Do you want to be their husband ? Ew. No. Even if it's all fictional, seeing it as someone who knows the story is disturbing. And it's cringe. Marriage implicated in a fanfic that is addressed towards young kids ? I was 9 when I entered this, if I saw that at 9...
I'm sorry, it's just too mushy. Sometimes it's incredible how the theming of the zombies has became secondary. Like... Cringeh's getting kidnapped? OK, you all hate him, but the little amount of emphasis put about it is incredibly low. You focus more on kissing Lemon and in the annoying love square track between Hiku, Shifu, Lemon and you. It is the primary element of this episode. Cringeh has been kidnapped and nobody cares. Everything that matters is lovey lovey lovey dovey dovey dovey...
I'm sorry. It's just too cringe to my taste.
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1On 2023-01-07 at 13:41:57
I won't join this since I'm not a fond of the theming and there's just too much fanfics nowadays, I won't join all of them sorry.
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3I Need Requests
On 2023-12-05 at 01:50:58
Okay. What is going on here?
Oh nothing, just MKPC forum members in their natural habitat.
1On 2023-12-04 at 01:45:20
Rules for requests
1. No complete mode
2. No cringe stuff
That's all, bye!
1. No complete mode
2. No cringe stuff
That's all, bye!
Person cringing made in complete mode
DID YOU KNOW THAT: Bullying Is Illegal
DID YOU KNOW THAT : Nobody bullied anyone
[Fanfic] Alien Invasion
On 2023-04-24 at 02:29:31
I wonder if I'll decide to show up again in season 2?
You did, the prologue just got released and it is confirmed, you have a line
11On 2023-04-22 at 15:08:19
Nah but this is accurate. I love to go into the school's bathroom with my best friend and discuss there, about kpop notably, like if it was a cafe 😭
It's not as cringe as yall make it to be. It's fun cringe, which is fun, which is good.
It's not as cringe as yall make it to be. It's fun cringe, which is fun, which is good.
On 2023-04-13 at 10:15:12
This is actually
good, it is intense but chill and funny, also I forgot I was even in this lol 💀
good, it is intense but chill and funny, also I forgot I was even in this lol 💀
On 2023-02-20 at 02:21:42
idc abt double post
i recently found a nice online tool for adding bbcode (e.g colored text) to fanfics
you just paste the text and add the code here
it's way better since you have way more space and you can see things way more clearly
here's the link: https://bbcode.ilma.dev
and here's a screenshot of the tool in action
i recently found a nice online tool for adding bbcode (e.g colored text) to fanfics
you just paste the text and add the code here
it's way better since you have way more space and you can see things way more clearly
here's the link: https://bbcode.ilma.dev
and here's a screenshot of the tool in action
PAY ME COPYRIGHT RIGHT NOW OR ELSE I AM SPRAYING THE HELL OUT OF THE TREE ON YOUR HEAD
Just kidding, great episode !
6On 2023-01-16 at 17:48:19
tbh swears make fanfics better in some ways
i mean it would be useless for some topics
i mean it would be useless for some topics
I completely agree, swears add humanity and personnality to the characters
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1On 2023-01-11 at 16:21:23
Chapter 6: Friends and a New Plan
Alien Leader: DAMMIT! THOSE PUNY BITCHES BROKE THE CHIPS, NOW WE CAN'T USE THEM AS SERVANTS, DAMMIT!!! WHAT THE HELL DO WE DO!!!
Adviser: Sir, you don't have to worry, remember when we visited the graveyard in our planet? I grabbed an evil alien ghost. We can use it to possess it.
Alien Leader: Ah yes! We shall possess them with the ghost! What a wonderful idea I've made.
Adviser: Sometimes in life, I still wonder what I exist.
Alien Leader: So where's the ghost?
Adviser: In the science room of the cave.
He grabs the jar and releases the ghost.
Ghost: Who has woken me up from my slumber?
Alien Leader: Hello, you're currently in planet...ok I don't give a crap about the name. So I want you to possess one of these people in this picture. *shows picture* Then make em do badass stuff by kicking their ass.
Ghost: Okay, what do I get in return?
Alien Leader: Some grass for you to touch.
Ghost: Ok, I'm gonna go now, adios mfs.
Meanwhile, the gang made a makeshift raft and a few oars from the airship's wood and rowed away into the sea. After 4 hours of no food, no water, and constant rowing, they've arrived at the GCN Yoshi Circuit port where ER Mac and Kid were staying.
Osc: Finally, we arrived at Yoshi Circuit. Now I can buy some food and a bo'oh o' wa'er.
TheOuchy1: Home sweet home.
Fiery: Let's go to the supermarket. I'll pay.
ER Mac is talking with kid in the supermarket.
ER Mac: So then, I told him to SHUT THE FUCK UP OR ELSE I'M KICKING YO A-oh hey guys, didn't see you guys😅
IlluZhion: Hello ER Mac, hello kid, what're you guys doing here?
ER Mac: I live here and kid came here for vacation. Want to go to my house? We're heading back since it's dusk.
Popplio: Sure, I'm starving right now! Let's go!
After eating dinner and watching random shows on YouTube, they went to bed. In the middle of the night, this happened...
BOOM!!!
Lely: HOLY SHIT WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT?!
Ssg: I'm scared...
Kid: It looks like a UFO crashed in to someone's house...all the aliens died except for 1, he's terrorizing the city.
Max: We have to evacuate. Nudge, K, kill that alien.
Nudge: DIE!!! *massive shooting*
Alien dies
K: He died, COULDN'T YOU AT LEAST GIVEN ME THE SATISFACTION KILL THAT ALIEN?!
Nudge: No.
Popplio: I'll extinguish the fire. Water Gun!!!
Dietsoda: Let's head back to sleep.
At 4:30am...Max wakes up
Max: *Yawns* Jeez, it's pretty dark outside...what time is it??? *looks at clock* WTF?! 4:30AM?!
StarSplizz: Gm Max.
Dark: Gm man.
Max: What the heck? You guys are already awake.
StarSplizz: I just went to piss, I'm going back to sleep. Gn.
Dark: I wake up hella early, depends on my body when I wanna sleep. I was gonna go for an early morning walk. Wanna come? I got a flashlight.
Max: Sure.
Dark and Max left the house. Unluckily for them, the ghost had just arrived at Yoshi Circuit and sees them walking.
Ghost: I see that demon and that...foxgirl thing??? Eh whatever, I'll just eenie meenie minee mo to choose who to possess.
The ghost rushes at Dark and Max and enters Max's body.
Max: Dark, I feel weir-*Falls to the ground*
Dark: Oh my god!!! Are you ok Max??? Are you breathing? Do you need air support? Speak to me...MAX, MAX, MAX!!!
Max: D-Dar-Dark, I'm being pos-.
Max stands up, ready to attack Dark...
Dark: You're? Oh hey you're back. We better head back before you-*gets kicked* AGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Everyone in ER Mac's house hears Dark's scream for help.
Noob: Was that Dark?
Osc: What if he's in danger? We must save him!
StarSplizz: Actually, Max and Dark took a morning walk.
Lely: MAX?! WHAT IF HE'S ALSO IN DANGER? HURRY!!!
They ran as fast as they could and saw Max going to punch Dark who's on the floor
Dark: WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU? ARE YOU INSANE?
Max: Fool! I never wanted you as a friend...you're just a stupid little mf that somehow existed in my life.
Nudge: MAX?! ARE YOU OK???
Max: Shut up. I'm going to finish this devil and send him to where he came from, hell.
IlluZhion: Oh hell nah!!! YOU AIN'T GETTING CLOSE TO HIM!!! *Kicks Max*
Dark: Thanks.
Fiery: Dark's badly bruised. He might have to be taken to the hospital. Is Max mind controlled?
Noob: No...his eyes aren't red...what's with him anyways...
Max: YOU'RE GONNA REGRET KICKING ME!!!
Max uses telekinesis to levitate objects to throw them at the gang.Totally didn't search what powers Senko has
TheOuchy1: Max is going crazy, now he's using telekinesis to yeet all of those stuff towards us!!!
Osc: We must escape!!! We might get hit!!!
Everyone runs away except for Lely
Kid: LELY, WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!
Lely: It's risky...but...I'm gonna calm Max down.
Fiery: Are you stupid?! you might die!!!
Lely: I'm gonna try anyways!!! Max, chill down. You don't have to fight! What's wrong with you?
Max: You dare to act brave? You have made a big mistake.
Lely: Max, please! Tell me! Is that even you?
Max: It's me. You're just being a fool!
Lely: Max, you're not acting yourself, please come back to your senses.
Max: I'M DONE WASTING TIME, I'M GOING TO END YOU.
Max levitates with his fist headed towards Lely, Lely is in a state of shock that she can't move. What happens to Lely. Will Max be free from the ghost. Find out on Chapter 7...
Alien Leader: DAMMIT! THOSE PUNY BITCHES BROKE THE CHIPS, NOW WE CAN'T USE THEM AS SERVANTS, DAMMIT!!! WHAT THE HELL DO WE DO!!!
Adviser: Sir, you don't have to worry, remember when we visited the graveyard in our planet? I grabbed an evil alien ghost. We can use it to possess it.
Alien Leader: Ah yes! We shall possess them with the ghost! What a wonderful idea I've made.
Adviser: Sometimes in life, I still wonder what I exist.
Alien Leader: So where's the ghost?
Adviser: In the science room of the cave.
He grabs the jar and releases the ghost.
Ghost: Who has woken me up from my slumber?
Alien Leader: Hello, you're currently in planet...ok I don't give a crap about the name. So I want you to possess one of these people in this picture. *shows picture* Then make em do badass stuff by kicking their ass.
Ghost: Okay, what do I get in return?
Alien Leader: Some grass for you to touch.
Ghost: Ok, I'm gonna go now, adios mfs.
Meanwhile, the gang made a makeshift raft and a few oars from the airship's wood and rowed away into the sea. After 4 hours of no food, no water, and constant rowing, they've arrived at the GCN Yoshi Circuit port where ER Mac and Kid were staying.
Osc: Finally, we arrived at Yoshi Circuit. Now I can buy some food and a bo'oh o' wa'er.
TheOuchy1: Home sweet home.
Fiery: Let's go to the supermarket. I'll pay.
ER Mac is talking with kid in the supermarket.
ER Mac: So then, I told him to SHUT THE FUCK UP OR ELSE I'M KICKING YO A-oh hey guys, didn't see you guys😅
IlluZhion: Hello ER Mac, hello kid, what're you guys doing here?
ER Mac: I live here and kid came here for vacation. Want to go to my house? We're heading back since it's dusk.
Popplio: Sure, I'm starving right now! Let's go!
After eating dinner and watching random shows on YouTube, they went to bed. In the middle of the night, this happened...
BOOM!!!
Lely: HOLY SHIT WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT?!
Ssg: I'm scared...
Kid: It looks like a UFO crashed in to someone's house...all the aliens died except for 1, he's terrorizing the city.
Max: We have to evacuate. Nudge, K, kill that alien.
Nudge: DIE!!! *massive shooting*
Alien dies
K: He died, COULDN'T YOU AT LEAST GIVEN ME THE SATISFACTION KILL THAT ALIEN?!
Nudge: No.
Popplio: I'll extinguish the fire. Water Gun!!!
Dietsoda: Let's head back to sleep.
At 4:30am...Max wakes up
Max: *Yawns* Jeez, it's pretty dark outside...what time is it??? *looks at clock* WTF?! 4:30AM?!
StarSplizz: Gm Max.
Dark: Gm man.
Max: What the heck? You guys are already awake.
StarSplizz: I just went to piss, I'm going back to sleep. Gn.
Dark: I wake up hella early, depends on my body when I wanna sleep. I was gonna go for an early morning walk. Wanna come? I got a flashlight.
Max: Sure.
Dark and Max left the house. Unluckily for them, the ghost had just arrived at Yoshi Circuit and sees them walking.
Ghost: I see that demon and that...foxgirl thing??? Eh whatever, I'll just eenie meenie minee mo to choose who to possess.
The ghost rushes at Dark and Max and enters Max's body.
Max: Dark, I feel weir-*Falls to the ground*
Dark: Oh my god!!! Are you ok Max??? Are you breathing? Do you need air support? Speak to me...MAX, MAX, MAX!!!
Max: D-Dar-Dark, I'm being pos-.
Max stands up, ready to attack Dark...
Dark: You're? Oh hey you're back. We better head back before you-*gets kicked* AGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH.
Everyone in ER Mac's house hears Dark's scream for help.
Noob: Was that Dark?
Osc: What if he's in danger? We must save him!
StarSplizz: Actually, Max and Dark took a morning walk.
Lely: MAX?! WHAT IF HE'S ALSO IN DANGER? HURRY!!!
They ran as fast as they could and saw Max going to punch Dark who's on the floor
Dark: WHAT'S WRONG WITH YOU? ARE YOU INSANE?
Max: Fool! I never wanted you as a friend...you're just a stupid little mf that somehow existed in my life.
Nudge: MAX?! ARE YOU OK???
Max: Shut up. I'm going to finish this devil and send him to where he came from, hell.
IlluZhion: Oh hell nah!!! YOU AIN'T GETTING CLOSE TO HIM!!! *Kicks Max*
Dark: Thanks.
Fiery: Dark's badly bruised. He might have to be taken to the hospital. Is Max mind controlled?
Noob: No...his eyes aren't red...what's with him anyways...
Max: YOU'RE GONNA REGRET KICKING ME!!!
Max uses telekinesis to levitate objects to throw them at the gang.
TheOuchy1: Max is going crazy, now he's using telekinesis to yeet all of those stuff towards us!!!
Osc: We must escape!!! We might get hit!!!
Everyone runs away except for Lely
Kid: LELY, WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!
Lely: It's risky...but...I'm gonna calm Max down.
Fiery: Are you stupid?! you might die!!!
Lely: I'm gonna try anyways!!! Max, chill down. You don't have to fight! What's wrong with you?
Max: You dare to act brave? You have made a big mistake.
Lely: Max, please! Tell me! Is that even you?
Max: It's me. You're just being a fool!
Lely: Max, you're not acting yourself, please come back to your senses.
Max: I'M DONE WASTING TIME, I'M GOING TO END YOU.
Max levitates with his fist headed towards Lely, Lely is in a state of shock that she can't move. What happens to Lely. Will Max be free from the ghost. Find out on Chapter 7...
3 lines
but that aside good episode You’re lucky I only got 2….
now you know how it feels being the most underused character in a fanfic
Amateurs. One line. That's it.
pffft you’re the amateur i’ve experienced this way more
True, but have you ever experienced only getting ONE line? Every time I see you with this problem you've gotten 2-3
probably have at least once
Yeha, you did in the first episode of MKPCverse's fake season 2. Anyways, you should stop complaining. Aside from me, Max and the Alien squad, msot of the other paticipants actually got very little lines. You should actually look to how good the episode is instead of always ranting about your lines. It has gottenn annoying now. I already got NO line in one Danganronpa MKPC episode I was alive in, and I didn't complain, because at the end of the day, what matters is the plot, not the lines. If you didn't get much lines because the plot made you a secondary character at that moment, it's not a big deal really.
41On 2023-01-09 at 01:49:18
Chapter 4: Part 2
*In the sky*
Lely: What the hell, why am I in the sky!!! Illuzhion, where are we going?
Illuzhion: We're going to a cave. *turns towards Lely*
*Thinks to herself* Lely: Wait, Illuzhion has a different eye color, it's red...there's something wrong with him.
*They arrive*
*Illuzhion pushes Lely in*
Lely: W-w-where am I?
*Adviser talking to an alien doctor*
Adviser: So you're saying that the boss got kicked in the stomach hard so he's in a coma? Oh hello...PISS OFF DOC
Lely: WHO ARE YOU???
Adviser: That-is none of your business. Illuzhion, who's this?
Illuzhion: Lely.
Lely: ILLUZHION WTH?!
Adviser: I see...well, Lely, welcome to the aliens' secret base. Of course, we dont want you telling your puny friends so...we're gonna mind control you just like Illuzhion.
Illuzhion: Sir, I feel kinda hungry for blood, mind if I take a sip out of him.
Adviser: Sure!!!
Lely: HOLD ON WHAT?!
*Illuzhion bites Lely's neck*
Lely: HOLY SHIT!!! *squirms into a curl and screams* IT HURTS!!! AGHHHHHHHH.
Illuzhion: I want more!!! *Grabs his daggers and stabs him in Lely's abdomen*
Lely: IT HURTS!!! HELP!!! AHHHHHHHH
Adviser: ILLUZHION, WE'RE NOT SUPPOSED TO KILL HER!!! WE'RE GONNA GET ARRESTED!!! *treats wound*
Illuzhion: Sorry...
Adviser: Anyways, time to add the chip, I'll hide it in his hair.
Lely: What chip? Doritos?
Adviser: No dumbass, a microchip to mind control you.
Lely: Hold on what? *chip was put in his hair*
Lely: AHHHHHHH WTF, IT HURTS, WHAT'S THIS ENERGY AHHHHHHHHHHHH. *after like 30 seconds of pure agony, she becomes mind control*
What will happen in Chapter 5? Will Illuzhion and Lely be normal again? Find out on Chapter 5...
EDIT: Illuzhion wanted me to make Lely suffer...so...
*In the sky*
Lely: What the hell, why am I in the sky!!! Illuzhion, where are we going?
Illuzhion: We're going to a cave. *turns towards Lely*
*Thinks to herself* Lely: Wait, Illuzhion has a different eye color, it's red...there's something wrong with him.
*They arrive*
*Illuzhion pushes Lely in*
Lely: W-w-where am I?
*Adviser talking to an alien doctor*
Adviser: So you're saying that the boss got kicked in the stomach hard so he's in a coma? Oh hello...PISS OFF DOC
Lely: WHO ARE YOU???
Adviser: That-is none of your business. Illuzhion, who's this?
Illuzhion: Lely.
Lely: ILLUZHION WTH?!
Adviser: I see...well, Lely, welcome to the aliens' secret base. Of course, we dont want you telling your puny friends so...we're gonna mind control you just like Illuzhion.
Illuzhion: Sir, I feel kinda hungry for blood, mind if I take a sip out of him.
Adviser: Sure!!!
Lely: HOLD ON WHAT?!
*Illuzhion bites Lely's neck*
Lely: HOLY SHIT!!! *squirms into a curl and screams* IT HURTS!!! AGHHHHHHHH.
Illuzhion: I want more!!! *Grabs his daggers and stabs him in Lely's abdomen*
Lely: IT HURTS!!! HELP!!! AHHHHHHHH
Adviser: ILLUZHION, WE'RE NOT SUPPOSED TO KILL HER!!! WE'RE GONNA GET ARRESTED!!! *treats wound*
Illuzhion: Sorry...
Adviser: Anyways, time to add the chip, I'll hide it in his hair.
Lely: What chip? Doritos?
Adviser: No dumbass, a microchip to mind control you.
Lely: Hold on what? *chip was put in his hair*
Lely: AHHHHHHH WTF, IT HURTS, WHAT'S THIS ENERGY AHHHHHHHHHHHH. *after like 30 seconds of pure agony, she becomes mind control*
What will happen in Chapter 5? Will Illuzhion and Lely be normal again? Find out on Chapter 5...
EDIT: Illuzhion wanted me to make Lely suffer...so...
I'm always abused in this fanfic 😭 why did IlluZhion wanted to make me suffer ? I'll get my revenge...
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212On 2022-12-17 at 09:41:27
Short, but cool.
No complaints from me.
No complaints from me.
On 2022-12-15 at 19:41:23
Lely
Very kind, slightly smart, but can also be a dumbass. Obsessed by cuteness, very sensitive...
Gosh I'm so fucking tired of repeating the same thing all over again, go check MKPC Gore (Nudge's fanfic) and rip off my personnality from this fanfic
Species : Human
Very kind, slightly smart, but can also be a dumbass. Obsessed by cuteness, very sensitive...
Gosh I'm so fucking tired of repeating the same thing all over again, go check MKPC Gore (Nudge's fanfic) and rip off my personnality from this fanfic
Species : Human
1Track Building Contest : Autumn 2023 / Concours de création de circuits : Automne 2023
On 2023-12-05 at 01:49:44
Also RHcks and Starl top 2 was literally so obvious, you could see it coming from a mile away lmao
1On 2023-12-05 at 00:00:51
Top 10, not bad, but I did have first place in another TBC...
The standards are not the same here, there are more judges, and overall more time to evaluate tracks with a set criteria.
On 2023-12-04 at 23:50:20
Congratulations to everyone who participated 😄