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Ralsei: Hello there! Welcome to The Twilight Zone! You will go to many adventures like in the cave where you will find a stone that glows that will lead the way to the Zone Of Twilight! there is a guard that blocks the entrance though, you got to get past him! good luck! And introduce yourselves please!

Hampter: Hello, i'm Hampter. I am a sarcastic bunny that tries to be kind.

Knoah: Hi! i'm Knoah! i like anime alot. i'd like to join you on anything!

Quorzel: Hello! I'm Quorzel! i am just some random dude who is inpatient. I just came here to check this out.

Kay: Hello. i'm kay. i am from the carrribbean. There is nothing much about me. Shoutout to anyone from carribbean!
Tendo: I am tendo, I am a yellow roblox player. i am very lazy but sometimes im not.
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Absolutely not a plagiarism of Hampter's latest fanfic :p

Otherwise I want to be there (even if I feel that it's not going to be good, but it's that an impression, I would see what it's worth when the prologue or the first chapter is released)
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The "shards" is obviously from Nudge's new fanfic, are the characters okay with being a character ?

And Max, he didn't say he needed people.
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Lely wrote:
The "shards" is obviously from Nudge's new fanfic, are the characters okay with being a character ?

And Max, he didn't say he needed people.

yeah they said it was okay, i even asked them. And plus there is no relation to Nudge's Fanfic, the whole story is very diffrent than you think.
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Fair enough, but the fact there is shards...
The story will be different of course, but why wouldn't you take your own thing ?
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Lely wrote:
Fair enough, but the fact there is shards...
The story will be different of course, but why wouldn't you take your own thing ?

litteraly i wasn't thinking of nudgy's fanfic
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tendokiddo wrote:
Lely wrote:
Fair enough, but the fact there is shards...
The story will be different of course, but why wouldn't you take your own thing ?

litteraly i wasn't thinking of nudgy's fanfic

Bruh. What a coincidence, two fanfics include shards and they are
both recent...
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Lely wrote:
tendokiddo wrote:
Lely wrote:
Fair enough, but the fact there is shards...
The story will be different of course, but why wouldn't you take your own thing ?

litteraly i wasn't thinking of nudgy's fanfic

Bruh. What a coincidence, two fanfics include shards and they are
both recent...

ok ok ill change the name but is going to be a while before i think of something
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I'm here!
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Master8 wrote:
I'm here!

im making the first chapter
i think youll like it
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Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???:Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master! Max: we will be following! To be continued...
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tendokiddo wrote:
Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???:Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them. Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
To be continued...Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master! Max: we will be following! To be continued...

Confused about the colors. It would be better if they stayed consistent like this:
Hampter: #F60 (orange)
Quorzel: red
Kay: aqua
Tendo: Blue
Knoah: Green
Master: yellow
Max: teal (instead of navy)
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tendokiddo wrote:
Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???:Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them. Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
To be continued...Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master! Max: we will be following! To be continued...

Confused about the colors. It would be better if they stayed consistent like this:
Hampter: Red
Quorzel: White
Tendo: Blue
Knoah: Green
Master: yellow
Max: teal (instead of navy)

max feels like a navy to me
Messages 5322 - King Mario King Mario
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tendokiddo wrote:
tendokiddo wrote:
Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???:Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them. Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
To be continued...Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master! Max: we will be following! To be continued...

Confused about the colors. It would be better if they stayed consistent like this:
Hampter: Red
Quorzel: White
Tendo: Blue
Knoah: Green
Master: yellow
Max: teal (instead of navy)

max feels like a navy to me

He types his messages with teal
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tendokiddo wrote:
tendokiddo wrote:
Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???:Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them. Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
To be continued...Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master! Max: we will be following! To be continued...

Confused about the colors. It would be better if they stayed consistent like this:
Hampter: Red
Quorzel: White
Tendo: Blue
Knoah: Green
Master: yellow
Max: teal (instead of navy)

max feels like a navy to me

He types his messages with teal

yeah but i don't feel like changing the colors.
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What you think of the story though??
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tendokiddo wrote:
Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???: Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them
Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master!
Max: we will be following! To be continued...

Fixed version
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tendokiddo wrote:
What you think of the story though??

It’s ok, I guess
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tendokiddo wrote:
Chapter 1: 2 Guys From A Cave.
Tendo: Morning
Hampter: Morning
Knoah: is that the only words you say at morning, what about good morning???
Tendo: nah im too lazy to say good morning.
Hampter: Same With Me.
Tendo: OOH WHAT IS THAT!? *JUMPS OUT OF WINDOW*
Hampter: There is something wrong with tendo.
Knoah: I think so too.
Quorzel: Um... what happened!?
Hampter: Tendo Jumped Out Of The Window.
Tendo:  Well, here is what i found, It wasn't something, it was someone, to be honest there is 2 people
???:Salut!
???: Hello!!!
Hampter: Who are those??
Tendo: These Are Max And Master! Max Is A Snorlax, And Master Is a Joltik, A Teeny Tiny Shrimp Joltik!
Max: Lol
Master: HEY, THATS A BIT OFFENSIVE, DON'T YOU THINK?
Tendo: Sorry...
Master: It's OK, just don't say it again. Mind: I can't believe I walked into that one.
Hampter: Lol! OH i remember! have you seen this weird Cave?? I heard it has a magic stone in there! Mind: Brain, Now you remember?? wow you have bad service.
Tendo: Riight.
Max: No, Hampter Is Right. I have been there. it is scary with those guards there
Master: SHH don't tell them Tendo: Lets Find It Then!
Kay: I'm not sure about this... Max and Master started to act strange when hampter was talking about the cave.
Tendo: Come on! get some adventure in you! Lets do this!
Kay: Ok... But don't say i didn't warn you...
Max: They don't know whats coming.. Heheheh.
Master: Hope they survive this one!
Max: Don't Hope..
Tendo: OK GANG LETS GO
Kay: Gulp...
Hampter: Here we go!
Knoah: Join Us Max And Master! Max: we will be following! To be continued...

Cool!!! I want to a part of the story!!!
T
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Same here.

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